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You use “Created to” twice really close together. This is repetitive, by using a synonym to replace one of these you will increase both interest and elegance.
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This starts with a conjunction. Ideally restructure the sentence so that it does not start with “But” or at the very least, set it off with a comma.
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You use the word “Intangible” which means imperceptible or insignificant. I would say “tangible” is a better word choice here.
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Early in the paragraph you use “human-to-human” with hyphens, however in the 6th sentence you present the same phrase without hyphens. I think either Continue reading...