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In short, some people use broadcast and Internet media as a mental and emotional retreat and refuge. Addicts are connected to their screens; their minds trapped for hours to the exclusion of the world around them. Addicts neglect family, work, studies, social relationships and themselves. This is an addictive obsession that is human-centered and screen-deep.
Luskin, B. (2012, March 29). Brain, Behavior, and Media. Psychology Today. Retrieved from https://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/the-media-psychology-effect/201203/brain-behavior-and-media
According to Luskin (2012), Internet media are used as a shelter by some individuals, addicts refuse their real lives and relationships in the favour of the screen because of their minds being totally devoured.
It can be concluded, that people with the addiction to the internet and social media substitute their own real lives with the imaginary digital ones existing on the screen. They are obsessed with and trapped inside their digital world, rendering them disconnected from their relationships and communication.
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