Example A is stronger compared to Example B in terms of narrative, structure and meeting the needs of the assessment. The assignment aims at reading and reviewing an article addressing organizational ethnic diversity, and effects on organizational outcomes.
In Example A, the writer has a greater insight to the topic and uses a very analytical approach in expressing ideas. The writer has a flow of ideas, narrating from one idea to the next related idea in terms of theme. The writer uses sub-topics which brings more clarity and understanding. The writer finally makes a critical analysis of the article showing its contributions, comments on different aspects and reaches a conclusion and gives recommendation; that there is a need for further research, thus achieving the assessment needs to a larger extent, compared to B.
On the other hand, in Example B, the writer narrates randomly, throwing in ideas without a particular organization of paragraphs, or following a particular form or the flow of ideas. The writer does not use sub-topics to help the reader in identifying the different points the writer is trying to put across. Hence the reader has to figure out for themselves different perspectives the writer is trying to talk about at different times. The writer shows a little understanding of the assessment needs, but does not achieve to bring out different ideas, and the critical analysis as required in reviewing an article.
The writers should aim at a more critical and analytical approach. The writers should present an approach which is more systematic in terms of narration and flow of ideas. From the introduction to the end, there should be succinct expression of ideas. There should be a proper introduction, conclusion and referencing. Conclusively the writers should aim at fully adhering to the assessment requirements.