Scenario 1:
Weaknesses in the existing email: The first and obvious weakness is that Michael Ryan has not bothered to find about more about Dr. Amanda (he has her business card), so as a consequence has not had the information to make it more personal to her, such as by mentioning the name of her company and her sports club, asking after her welfare, etc. Secondly, the email is all about him; it is entirely focused on Michael Ryan and makes little or no attempt to even mention polite niceties such as how nice it was to meet her at ...
